Hi, Jake!
Fri, 2007-05-25 20:33 | 
Please, tell me what problem I have in my poem. I know, I do. I am very open for critique. This is only the way to learn. Thank you for reply.
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Slightly improved...
Alone...
Alone, the rain is hitting ground.
Alone, like echo in the park,
Slow dancing tango all around,
Illusive shades are in the dark.
Alone, the wood is burning down.
Alone, one cigarette in pack.
I am a rustic circus clown,
Who follows old and tired hack.
Alone, in biggest noisy town.
Alone, like broken useless car.
My life - a strange unspoken noun,
That no one has pronounced so far.
Alone...
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